I can't really say much about the content of the update, but the English translation so far is really really rough. The original content had some oddities here and there that could be forgiven, but Luo Luo'ai's update has so many more issues.
Thanks for your comments. May I ask if you'd like to provide us with the details of the issues and translation mistakes you faced? In this way, we will be able to improve them in the near future.
Sure thing. First of all, let me say I'm still grateful there's a translation at all.
I'll just list some things here, starting on the new content:
"I frown. The indescribably strange sensation at the back of my head makes me hard to calm down." I would probably write it more like "The indescribably strange sensation at the back of my head makes it hard to stay calm." Saying "makes me hard to calm down" is just odd phrasing, you wouldn't say that about yourself. You could replace it with "makes it hard to calm down," using "it" instead of "me," and it would sound better, too. The current phrasing makes it sound like he's currently panicking, but the dialogue makes him sound more annoyed or inconvenienced than panicking.
There are a few spacing issues after punctuation, sometimes names aren't capitalized, sometimes words are capitalized when they shouldn't be. There's an instance of Yan Liaoliao having the "Maa" phrase that only Jiang Bolao has had so far.
Jiang Bolao has two instances of him saying "I find it!" rather than "I found it!"
"To be honest, it's an once-in-a-lifetime oppurtunity, it's such a pity to abandon it." The first one is forgivable, but it's "a once-in-a-lifetime," not an. That's just to do with how "once" is pronounced, whether you use 'a' or 'an' and it's a very understandable mistake. However, "oppurtunity" is just misspelled.
Same with "procrustination" later on.
"I can almost felt flames blazing in his eyes as he said those words." A lot of the issues are with tense, so it would be "feel" over "felt."
"I feel like I should speak something:" -> "I feel like I should say something:"
"But quarreling can't get us anywhere, right?" -> "But quarreling won't get us anywhere, right?"
"Then why does he joined the resistance?" -> "Then why did he join the resistance?"
I could keep going, but from what I've played so far, the translation is just full of stuff like that: issues with tense, phrasing, and spelling. I don't have the time to go through the entire script and check everything, though. Some of them are very understandable mistakes because English is really difficult, but some of the issues are mistakes that a spelling checker would catch. I don't know how the translation team is set up, but it seems like you need someone that is a native English speaker that can help fix issues like these, alongside the dual Chinese and English language speakers translating.
Again, I'm grateful we can read the visual novel at all, but the quantity of mistakes makes it difficult to fully enjoy it as it is meant to be enjoyed right now. It's still overall enjoyable, and the content and ideas behind the text are still good and can be understood, for the most part. I mean no disrespect towards the current translation team and their efforts, but it just needs someone to look over it all and clean things up.
Thanks for your feedback, and we have already checked through all the mistakes you provided to us! We will upload the refined version of the game next time, and thanks again for your support towards our game! 🥰
Really love Qian Lucai's expression! Especially the tired and sunken adult look, it's heartbreaking but also so deliciously melancholic! It's a really big contrast with his younger, unsure yet stern expression. It's like looking at the surface of a calm body of water, yet as time went on you can see impurities and bleakness breaking the once reflective and pristine surface. So awesome 💔 💖
Already love this!! The cast, art, and writing is really fun. The english translation is also pretty well written, I always go in kinda expecting indie projects translating from their original language into english to be a bit rough just because translations tough especially for indies, so I was really impressed!
All this to say thank you to everyone making this, you're doing amazing work. Very excited to see what the routes themselves are like. I love everyone, but my top favorites are Jiang Bolao, and of course Ji Ye
Thanks for your love for our video game(and also translation LOL)! We plan to keep working on this project and finish it in the next few years. Recently, we just published our latest version, and I hope you enjoy it this time as well!
Finally, it's been a long while since I found another hidden gem VN. Even though this VN is fairly new, but everything here is fabulous! Especially the writing is absolutely top-notch. Keep up the good work! This has a lot of potential for sure, I really want to see how it all will be play out.
Absolute master piece, havn't seen a good VN like that for a while. Just mind me asking if there are plans for future updates, and look forwards to those if there's any!!
I'm sorry to hear that, but I've checked the sources and found they work well. So please try it again, and if the problem still exists, you can join our Discord channel and message me privately, so in such a way I can share with you the version you want through Discord.
Thanks a lot for your understanding and patience! Wish you enjoy our game!
this is genuinely so amazing i am incredibly hooked on to this story <3 all the characters are so cute ESPECIALLY Boss Qian <33 i would fall for him too if i were a character as well. i look forward to more!!!!
Thanks a lot for your passion for our game! We will update our game regularly, and there will be more interesting stories between Boss Qian and other characters in the future!🥰 Please join our Discord channel and follow our X account to get to know the first-hand information on time!
I love this VN even though this is just the demo. The UI is easy to navigate and themed nicely; English translation was done well with minimal error; character sprites are full of expression - I especially love the little avatar in the bottom left conner, they bring so much energy to the VN! The animation at the plot twist was so well done, really captivated me with how smooth it is. All in all this has been a very interesting read, and I hope to see more!
Thanks for your recognition! We are polishing the translation now, so you'll see a better version of the translation this month! Also, we'll update a new side story on 15th! So be sure to follow us on X and Discord! 🥰
Straight 10/10, My only regret is that i reading this not knowing it's still a demo because now i have to be patient and wait. But my opinion despite only a demo this vn already beat 95% other vn that i already read.
I hope you have a good time making this and wish the best for the developer team
Heavens, it's so nice to find the good stuff at random. This looks amazing so far. The thematic, the direction, the execution!! It's so good, cant wait to see more of this.
Amazing and beautiful art! All the characters look really good and handsome, they are all charming too!
Plot very intriguing as well ,can't wait to see where it goes 🫣
My favourites are definitely Lucai and Luo luo'ai, they are really cute together ❤️ , especially when knowing Luo stayed by Lucai's side, when everyone else moved away 🥺
I‘m glad to hear that! We'll update a short side story between Luo and Qian in August! And there'll be a major update to the Luo route in September or October! So just wait and enjoy it!
We'll update a short side story between Luo and Qian in August! And there'll be a major update to the Luo route in September or October!Please follow us through X or Discord to receive firsthand information on time!
Thanks for playing our game! I noticed there are some spelling mistakes and unusual word choices, and we'll address them in the next version. Again, thank you for sharing!
I really want to use English to write this comment but I don't think I'm good enough to do it, so I'll just switch to my mother tongue. Thực sự để mà nói thì lâu lắm rồi, mới có một bộ furry visual novel để lại cho tôi một trải nghiệm khó tả thế này. Tôi đặc biệt ấn tượng với cốt truyện của game và nhận thấy nó có rất nhiều tiềm năng để khai thác và phát triển (có lẽ đây là một trong những bộ visual novel có plot xuất sắc nhất mà tôi từng đọc). Tuy nhiên, mặc dù route của tất cả các nhân vật trong game đều rất thú vị, đáng tiếc thay, gần như tôi chỉ có hứng thú với route ẩn của game, hay, có thể chính là "route của Kỷ Diệp (Ji Ye)", bởi đây là nhân vật để lại cho tôi ấn tượng sâu sắc nhất. Ấy vậy mà, trong thông báo trước đó mà tôi có xem được trong development log của game, tôi sẽ chỉ có thể trải nghiệm route trên vào gần cuối năm 2027, và điều này...quả là một điều khó khăn khi phải chờ đợi một khoảng thời gian lâu đến vậy. Do đó, tôi mong muốn tác giả của trò chơi có thể trả lời giúp tôi 1 câu hỏi về nhân vật này được không ?:((((( Câu hỏi của tôi khá đơn giản thôi, liệu Kỷ Diệp (Ji Ye) có thực sự đã "chết" không ? Số phận của nhân vật này khiến tôi cực kì hoang mang, tôi không biết liệu anh ở có thực sự đã chết hay không cho tới thời điểm hiện tại. Tôi chỉ muốn biết vậy thôi, bởi chi tiết cái chết của nhân vật này khiến tôi thực sự đau lòng. Tôi hiểu nó có thể dù là một chi tiết nhỏ, nhưng lại là spoiler quan trọng. Tuy nhiên, thực sự phải chờ đợi một khoảng thời gian dài như trên để có được câu trả lời, quả là một cơn ác mộng, do vậy tôi mong muốn tác giả hãy trả lời giúp tôi. Xin cảm ơn rất nhiều.
Thank you for your appreciation! However, I'm afraid we can‘t reveal this secret just yet. I can assure you, though, that Ji Ye, who is also my favorite character, will perform on every stage, regardless of the route you choose, and there will be happy endings for all characters in the end.
[dịch bởi AI] Cảm ơn bạn đã đánh giá cao! Tuy nhiên, tôi sợ rằng chúng tôi chưa thể tiết lộ bí mật này. Tuy nhiên, tôi có thể đảm bảo rằng Ji Ye, cũng là nhân vật yêu thích của tôi, sẽ biểu diễn trên mọi sân khấu, bất kể con đường bạn chọn, và cuối cùng sẽ có kết thúc hạnh phúc cho tất cả các nhân vật
hmm...good VN, and great art I think. I hope the story will have more surprises and keep the heat. There's just one thing about the way the characters call each other. Close friends don't usually call each other by their full names.I think they should call each other by their first names or nicknames. Just my opinion, everything still looks great!
Okay! I've read the new English Translation and safe to say I am impressed! It's definitely a far cry from me using a translation tool to read it in Chinese. There are some words that seems to be cut off or sentences that look out of place, but it's a normal issue overlooked.
Overall it was a great experience! Can't wait for the first Acts of every route! Every character is endearing and I'd love to read more of it 💚💚
Thank you ECFDPB for the experience! Good luck on you and future translators on this! Sending lots of love 💚💚💚💚💚
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I really enjoy this VN so far! Even though the translation is a little stilted at times, lots of emotion still gets through. The art is great as well!
Just saw the new side story posted on Patreon omg are we getting all of the prequels in the future? so excited!!!
loving the VN so far!! amazing work!
Just finished reading <危夜祷言>!
Am really surprised to see the cameo of Qian Lucai's uncle and Ji Ye's father!
Ahhhhh that ending is leaving me with a lot of questions too, I have we got more of the story in this game. Also Mr. Zhenli still SUS 👀
Just read the prequel stories and oh my goodness. I love this Visual novel even more now 😭
Reading the actual unfolding of the events that are only mentioned briefly in game is so satisfying.
Also huge fan of snow leopard and fox story! Mr. Zhenli is very mysterious though ~
is this a romance visual novel?
Yeah, my favorite character right now is hyena Yan . Looking forward to his second chapter!
Kinda gay ngl
I can't really say much about the content of the update, but the English translation so far is really really rough. The original content had some oddities here and there that could be forgiven, but Luo Luo'ai's update has so many more issues.
Thanks for your comments. May I ask if you'd like to provide us with the details of the issues and translation mistakes you faced? In this way, we will be able to improve them in the near future.
Sure thing. First of all, let me say I'm still grateful there's a translation at all.
I'll just list some things here, starting on the new content:
"I frown. The indescribably strange sensation at the back of my head makes me hard to calm down." I would probably write it more like "The indescribably strange sensation at the back of my head makes it hard to stay calm." Saying "makes me hard to calm down" is just odd phrasing, you wouldn't say that about yourself. You could replace it with "makes it hard to calm down," using "it" instead of "me," and it would sound better, too. The current phrasing makes it sound like he's currently panicking, but the dialogue makes him sound more annoyed or inconvenienced than panicking.
There are a few spacing issues after punctuation, sometimes names aren't capitalized, sometimes words are capitalized when they shouldn't be. There's an instance of Yan Liaoliao having the "Maa" phrase that only Jiang Bolao has had so far.
Jiang Bolao has two instances of him saying "I find it!" rather than "I found it!"
"To be honest, it's an once-in-a-lifetime oppurtunity, it's such a pity to abandon it." The first one is forgivable, but it's "a once-in-a-lifetime," not an. That's just to do with how "once" is pronounced, whether you use 'a' or 'an' and it's a very understandable mistake. However, "oppurtunity" is just misspelled.
Same with "procrustination" later on.
"I can almost felt flames blazing in his eyes as he said those words." A lot of the issues are with tense, so it would be "feel" over "felt."
"I feel like I should speak something:" -> "I feel like I should say something:"
"But quarreling can't get us anywhere, right?" -> "But quarreling won't get us anywhere, right?"
"Then why does he joined the resistance?" -> "Then why did he join the resistance?"
I could keep going, but from what I've played so far, the translation is just full of stuff like that: issues with tense, phrasing, and spelling. I don't have the time to go through the entire script and check everything, though. Some of them are very understandable mistakes because English is really difficult, but some of the issues are mistakes that a spelling checker would catch. I don't know how the translation team is set up, but it seems like you need someone that is a native English speaker that can help fix issues like these, alongside the dual Chinese and English language speakers translating.
Again, I'm grateful we can read the visual novel at all, but the quantity of mistakes makes it difficult to fully enjoy it as it is meant to be enjoyed right now. It's still overall enjoyable, and the content and ideas behind the text are still good and can be understood, for the most part. I mean no disrespect towards the current translation team and their efforts, but it just needs someone to look over it all and clean things up.
Thanks for your feedback, and we have already checked through all the mistakes you provided to us! We will upload the refined version of the game next time, and thanks again for your support towards our game! 🥰
Really love Qian Lucai's expression! Especially the tired and sunken adult look, it's heartbreaking but also so deliciously melancholic! It's a really big contrast with his younger, unsure yet stern expression. It's like looking at the surface of a calm body of water, yet as time went on you can see impurities and bleakness breaking the once reflective and pristine surface. So awesome 💔 💖
Thanks for your love! Qian Lucai is such an interesting character, and we will release more of both his childhood and recent stories in the future!
Looking forward to it! The fact that his future occupation in the alternate future post in X is censored is making him more and more mysterious ~
Already love this!! The cast, art, and writing is really fun. The english translation is also pretty well written, I always go in kinda expecting indie projects translating from their original language into english to be a bit rough just because translations tough especially for indies, so I was really impressed!
All this to say thank you to everyone making this, you're doing amazing work. Very excited to see what the routes themselves are like. I love everyone, but my top favorites are Jiang Bolao, and of course Ji Ye
Thanks for your love for our video game(and also translation LOL)! We plan to keep working on this project and finish it in the next few years. Recently, we just published our latest version, and I hope you enjoy it this time as well!
Finally, it's been a long while since I found another hidden gem VN. Even though this VN is fairly new, but everything here is fabulous! Especially the writing is absolutely top-notch. Keep up the good work! This has a lot of potential for sure, I really want to see how it all will be play out.
GREAT THANKS for your praise! We have already released the latest version of the game, and I hope you can enjoy it as well this time!
Absolute master piece, havn't seen a good VN like that for a while. Just mind me asking if there are plans for future updates, and look forwards to those if there's any!!
We will release the sponsor-exclusive English version tomorrow, and the public version will be available on November 25th.
For the plan, the next update will be about Yan's route. Please just be patient and support us if you like our game!
Just out of curiosity, is this part of the game not translated into English yet, or could there be an issue with my files?
This part of the content has not been translated yet. The translation work is ongoing.
I’ll be looking forward to future updates! I really love this VN.
Oh wow, this VN is truly amazing! Can't wait for more!
Thanks for your recognition!
因为游戏是用Unity制作的哈哈哈
来自马来西亚的我想说：这故事很不错！制作组加油
[Terjemahan]
Terima kasih kerana menyukai permainan kami! Kami akan terus mengemas kini berkualiti tinggi!🥰
[AI翻译]
感谢你对我们游戏的热爱！我们会继续保持高质量地更新的！🥰
I really love this vn! It's very hard to find a good vn like this istg
Thanks for your recognition! We'll keep presenting the best versions of the game to all our followers!
你好，当我尝试下载游戏时无法成功，我已经尝试使用了多种不同的浏览器。我不确定这是否与最近的更新有关。
提前感谢。
Hi, when I try to download the game Im not able and Im trying with diverse browsers. Im not sure if could be because of the recent update.
Thanks in advance
I'm sorry to hear that, but I've checked the sources and found they work well. So please try it again, and if the problem still exists, you can join our Discord channel and message me privately, so in such a way I can share with you the version you want through Discord.
Thanks a lot for your understanding and patience! Wish you enjoy our game!
故事读起来好真实和亲切！
So Real and Nice !
感谢认可！😊我们会努力展现出最好的成品的！
this is genuinely so amazing i am incredibly hooked on to this story <3 all the characters are so cute ESPECIALLY Boss Qian <33 i would fall for him too if i were a character as well. i look forward to more!!!!
Thanks a lot for your passion for our game! We will update our game regularly, and there will be more interesting stories between Boss Qian and other characters in the future!🥰 Please join our Discord channel and follow our X account to get to know the first-hand information on time!
挺优秀的作品，开发周期需要多久啊
我们将会尽力每个月都有更新！这个月的15号将会更新一个支线故事的公开版和罗罗埃主线的第一章的赞助版！
整个游戏的剧情走向是都已经确定了的吗，就是每个角色的结局都已经确定好了就差故事的打磨了吗。最后给个祝福吧，希望整个游戏项目能做完
我们很早之前就定下了一个粗略的大纲，虽然说具体细节还有待润色，但是我们会尽最大努力完成这个项目的！
I love this VN even though this is just the demo. The UI is easy to navigate and themed nicely; English translation was done well with minimal error; character sprites are full of expression - I especially love the little avatar in the bottom left conner, they bring so much energy to the VN! The animation at the plot twist was so well done, really captivated me with how smooth it is. All in all this has been a very interesting read, and I hope to see more!
Thanks for your recognition! We are polishing the translation now, so you'll see a better version of the translation this month! Also, we'll update a new side story on 15th! So be sure to follow us on X and Discord! 🥰
This vn was peak cant wait for next updet
Thanks for your enthusiasm! We'll update a new version on 15th!
U guys definitely peak
所以我为什么要来itch找游戏
哈哈哈哈哈也许这边找游戏方便一些？哈哈哈
事实也确实是如此
Straight 10/10, My only regret is that i reading this not knowing it's still a demo because now i have to be patient and wait. But my opinion despite only a demo this vn already beat 95% other vn that i already read.
I hope you have a good time making this and wish the best for the developer team
Thanks for your praise! We'll try our best to finish this game as soon as possible!
Heavens, it's so nice to find the good stuff at random. This looks amazing so far. The thematic, the direction, the execution!! It's so good, cant wait to see more of this.
Thanks for your recognition! You can follow us through X or Discord to receive firsthand information on time!
喜欢！什么时候开粉丝群
QQ群其实很早就有了！是1029484474！
Really enjoyed it!!!!
Amazing and beautiful art! All the characters look really good and handsome, they are all charming too!
Plot very intriguing as well ,can't wait to see where it goes 🫣
My favourites are definitely Lucai and Luo luo'ai, they are really cute together ❤️ , especially when knowing Luo stayed by Lucai's side, when everyone else moved away 🥺
I‘m glad to hear that! We'll update a short side story between Luo and Qian in August! And there'll be a major update to the Luo route in September or October! So just wait and enjoy it!
Luo and Yan are my favorites
We'll update a short side story between Luo and Qian in August! And there'll be a major update to the Luo route in September or October!Please follow us through X or Discord to receive firsthand information on time!
Can I follow on Bluesky?
We haven't created a Bluesky account yet... We'll let you know if we do create an account in the future. For now, maybe try to follow us on Discord!
Already am
哇塞🤩，这么好
感谢支持！🥰
Loved the game!
Thanks for playing our game! I noticed there are some spelling mistakes and unusual word choices, and we'll address them in the next version. Again, thank you for sharing!
竟然有中文翻译，我爱你
啊啊啊我们就是中国的制作组啊哈哈哈哈。快去关注我们的bilibili和微博账号！
这是我第1次在外网网站上看到中文游戏的画风我也认为是非常好的加油（〜^∇^)〜
谢谢肯定! 也请务必关注我们的bilibili和微博账号!🥳
还有一个天合会，值得一试！但是英王是个优秀游戏！
I really want to use English to write this comment but I don't think I'm good enough to do it, so I'll just switch to my mother tongue. Thực sự để mà nói thì lâu lắm rồi, mới có một bộ furry visual novel để lại cho tôi một trải nghiệm khó tả thế này. Tôi đặc biệt ấn tượng với cốt truyện của game và nhận thấy nó có rất nhiều tiềm năng để khai thác và phát triển (có lẽ đây là một trong những bộ visual novel có plot xuất sắc nhất mà tôi từng đọc). Tuy nhiên, mặc dù route của tất cả các nhân vật trong game đều rất thú vị, đáng tiếc thay, gần như tôi chỉ có hứng thú với route ẩn của game, hay, có thể chính là "route của Kỷ Diệp (Ji Ye)", bởi đây là nhân vật để lại cho tôi ấn tượng sâu sắc nhất. Ấy vậy mà, trong thông báo trước đó mà tôi có xem được trong development log của game, tôi sẽ chỉ có thể trải nghiệm route trên vào gần cuối năm 2027, và điều này...quả là một điều khó khăn khi phải chờ đợi một khoảng thời gian lâu đến vậy. Do đó, tôi mong muốn tác giả của trò chơi có thể trả lời giúp tôi 1 câu hỏi về nhân vật này được không ?:((((( Câu hỏi của tôi khá đơn giản thôi, liệu Kỷ Diệp (Ji Ye) có thực sự đã "chết" không ? Số phận của nhân vật này khiến tôi cực kì hoang mang, tôi không biết liệu anh ở có thực sự đã chết hay không cho tới thời điểm hiện tại. Tôi chỉ muốn biết vậy thôi, bởi chi tiết cái chết của nhân vật này khiến tôi thực sự đau lòng. Tôi hiểu nó có thể dù là một chi tiết nhỏ, nhưng lại là spoiler quan trọng. Tuy nhiên, thực sự phải chờ đợi một khoảng thời gian dài như trên để có được câu trả lời, quả là một cơn ác mộng, do vậy tôi mong muốn tác giả hãy trả lời giúp tôi. Xin cảm ơn rất nhiều.
Thank you for your appreciation! However, I'm afraid we can‘t reveal this secret just yet. I can assure you, though, that Ji Ye, who is also my favorite character, will perform on every stage, regardless of the route you choose, and there will be happy endings for all characters in the end.
[dịch bởi AI]
Cảm ơn bạn đã đánh giá cao! Tuy nhiên, tôi sợ rằng chúng tôi chưa thể tiết lộ bí mật này. Tuy nhiên, tôi có thể đảm bảo rằng Ji Ye, cũng là nhân vật yêu thích của tôi, sẽ biểu diễn trên mọi sân khấu, bất kể con đường bạn chọn, và cuối cùng sẽ có kết thúc hạnh phúc cho tất cả các nhân vật
hmm...good VN, and great art I think. I hope the story will have more surprises and keep the heat. There's just one thing about the way the characters call each other. Close friends don't usually call each other by their full names. I think they should call each other by their first names or nicknames. Just my opinion, everything still looks great!
I see! Thanks for your recognition and suggestion! We'll polish the translation this month and upload a better version next month!
Best vn ever that I readed 10/10!
THANK YOU FOR YOUR PRAISE! WE'LL TRY OUR BEST TO PRESENT AN EVEN BETTER VERSION OF THE GAME!
No problem I will share this amazing vn towards other people cause this vn deserve to be famous and be recognized :}
🥰🥰🥰🥰
Okay! I've read the new English Translation and safe to say I am impressed! It's definitely a far cry from me using a translation tool to read it in Chinese. There are some words that seems to be cut off or sentences that look out of place, but it's a normal issue overlooked.
Overall it was a great experience! Can't wait for the first Acts of every route! Every character is endearing and I'd love to read more of it 💚💚
Thank you ECFDPB for the experience! Good luck on you and future translators on this! Sending lots of love 💚💚💚💚💚
Thanks for your support!🥰 We'll release the English version of the first act for Luo Luo'ai probably in September!
I'll definitely keep an eye out! Good luck on your work!
鬆獅大好
代姜伯劳谢过啦！感谢支持！🥰